See it here.
Added a lot of characterization internal dialogue to permit you to get more cozy with the antagonist. Maybe she’s got issues. So do you, I’ll bet! So identify with her.
Also fixed up the dialogue, more markers to clear up any ambiguity. I like to make the reader work, but I’ve been told that’s bad form if you have to back up and re-read something to figure out who’s talkin’.
Author Matt Bowes and the Dog's Breakfast 