Crumbling Empire – Chapter 1 rewrite

Crumbling Empire Concept Cover
Crumbling Empire Concept Cover

Kind reader, please see chapter 1 rewrite, here.

Fixes:

Added more he/she said tags, to make all dialogue speakers clear.

Added more internal dialogue for protag.

Added description of shuttles and HCA.

Added additional description of environs when possible.

+1000 words from previous draft.

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